Thanks so much! Sorry for the late reply! I forgot to come back and check the comments on my own post that day haha. Appreciate the subscription! My postings on here will likely be somewhat infrequent as I’m working on my first novel and that’s my main focus. And, yeah, I’ll definitely be updating this version based on Chuck’s feedback. So, this post will eventually be edited. Thanks again!!
I’m a humor guy too, so I know where you’re coming from, but trust your gut. If it feels right, then stick with it. I thought the story felt great. What guy going through all that is going to be up for cracking jokes?
True. If anything, the jokes maybe make it that much more heartbreaking I hope. I wanted the reader to have a mix of laughter, abandonment, and confusion. I wanted people to feel how much this fucked me up and blindsided me.
Thanks I appreciate it. I’m still trying to figure out if I can work more humor in at the beginning to make it a little lighter. It’s just so heavy. Thanks much! It was a tough experience.
Maegan, and for anyone who may have read the initial post, I’ve had to edit this a bunch since posting. There were a number of parts that weren’t working. Anyway, thanks again for reading.
Keep at it!
Chuck’s feedback was fantastic to read, and it really highlights the level you’ve already reached with this.
I loved your unusual metaphors, the microwave reference works on so many levels.
Subscribed and looking forward to the next iteration.
Thanks so much! Sorry for the late reply! I forgot to come back and check the comments on my own post that day haha. Appreciate the subscription! My postings on here will likely be somewhat infrequent as I’m working on my first novel and that’s my main focus. And, yeah, I’ll definitely be updating this version based on Chuck’s feedback. So, this post will eventually be edited. Thanks again!!
I’m a humor guy too, so I know where you’re coming from, but trust your gut. If it feels right, then stick with it. I thought the story felt great. What guy going through all that is going to be up for cracking jokes?
True. If anything, the jokes maybe make it that much more heartbreaking I hope. I wanted the reader to have a mix of laughter, abandonment, and confusion. I wanted people to feel how much this fucked me up and blindsided me.
Great stuff. Took me along for a ride back to my sturm and drang zeit. We've all had our Leahs.
Thanks I appreciate it. I’m still trying to figure out if I can work more humor in at the beginning to make it a little lighter. It’s just so heavy. Thanks much! It was a tough experience.
So glad you decided to post this. Very good work. Use the momentum.
Maegan, and for anyone who may have read the initial post, I’ve had to edit this a bunch since posting. There were a number of parts that weren’t working. Anyway, thanks again for reading.
Cool, I will check it out!
Thanks a ton!!! I appreciate it. I stepped away from writing for too long. I was ... distracted.